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The flowchart illustrate the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory

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This
 map depicts Garlsdon town with two potential locations for new supermarkets to be constructed. It is clear from the graph that
this
 industrial town has an exceptional place between other towns; it connects Hindon, Cransdon, and Bransdon.
According to
 what is shown, the first suggested location, S1, is in the north-west between the main road to Hindon and the railway in the countryside.
This
 store is expected to serve both Hindon and Garlsdon.
On the other hand
, the second planned possible place is in the Garlsdon
center
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, which is a traffic-free place,
in other words
,
this
 will make it much easier for the residents from the north and south to reach. Obviously,
this
 supermarket, if it
would be
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 constructed, it is expected to serve the whole area.
To sum up
, we could say that the second suggested location, S2, in the
center
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 of the town is near both residential areas,
subsequently
, it would be easier to be visited,
while
 the
first,
S1, is somehow far from the housing area.
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task achievement
Ensure that you address the prompt directly and provide a specific analysis of the flowchart, including clear descriptions of the steps and processes involved.
task achievement
Make sure your introduction and conclusion are clear and encapsulate the main points of your essay effectively. Also, ensure that your descriptions correlate directly to the graphic information provided.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Use cohesive devices to link your ideas and paragraphs together smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific details. In this context, it involves elucidating the individual steps and considering their implications or significance, as it relates to the production process shown in the flowchart.

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