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In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

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Humans are liable for diversity of environmental issues,
although
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 we could take stages to eliminate the damage that we are
efficting
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effecting
affecting
 to the planet.
This
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 essay will focus on
aforementioned argument
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the aforementioned argument
 by regarding from both perspectives that governments and
individuls
a human being
individuals
 in
tripartitle
involving three parties or elements
tripartite
 areas. Two of the major
problem
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problems
to
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of
 the environment are air pollution and garbage. Air pollution is the most common in large cities where
emmisions
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emissions
emotions
 from many different
factories
anything that contributes causally to a result
factors
 are condensed.
In addition
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, The quantities of garbage are produced, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans. As
individual
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an individual
 who is living in the society should take responsibility to participate in protecting the environment.
Firstly
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, people should grow trees in their houses and premises. By growing trees there are huge advantages.
For example
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, most of the polluted gases took over by trees and they release oxygen. Governments have more power than individuals. They could set up laws that ban the emission of wastes from factories.
In other words
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, cleanliness is important maintain a healthy environment,
hence
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government
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the government
 should emphasise the cleaners to clean the area thoroughly. In the final analysis. It is every individual’s responsibility to solve the problems.
Government
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The government
also
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 should take actions to extricate the environmental problems.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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