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information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure and work activities. to what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 digital era
technology
 plays vital role in our lives.It is modified many aspects of the person's life and in recent duration, they focus on our house, free
time
 and busy working tasks.
This
 is having more advantages
such
 as provided worldwide information and make people work easy, but it is
also
 has the negative effect Isolation. There are various positive effects of information
technology
 on people day to day life.Providing all around the world basic information on the internet which gets easily and
time
 consuming.
For example
, now days people get any kind of details related to business market, education and home remedies in few seconds with an accurate and so many options given by
technology
.
Furthermore
, other merits of digital machineries are that people make their work easily with it.In other word, mankind gives their less effort to work
as a result
 of having various machines which take lack of
time
 to do struggle and man do not require physical strength.
This
 is better for working people who are working in mainly wood companies where external forces needed by man, but recently it is reduced.
However
, there is one most common negative trend is isolation among people due to the internet.To explain
this
, in the era of telecommunication people prefer to meet online
instead
 of face to face communication which makes people live alone and isolated from social life.
For instance
,
such
 as Facebook, Skype and other social media with these social tools people spend most of the
time
 on
this
 one.As a consequence, mainly teenagers do not commute with their parents as they are at home with their children. In conclusion,
technology
 affects people in both way beneficial as well as determine, but finding details quickly and require less physical performance outweigh the isolation because of
technology
.
This
 will be needed balance in between.
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