Television as powerful educational tool or mindless entertainment ? What extent do you agree or disagree ?

Television as powerful studies tool or entertainment source. I partly agree with
this
view. I explain the view points in
up coming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
paragraph. On the one hand, I agree with
this
view what television is
entertainment source
Suggestion
an entertainment source
for everyone. Because
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
of channels are available on television
such
as discovery and history channels
.
Accept space
.
with
Suggestion
With
this
children
Suggestion
child
can learn new things from it and increase their knowledge.
Socandly
Suggestion
Secondly
, some time children
are feel
Suggestion
feel
bored form study so that it is
good entertainment source
Suggestion
a good entertainment source
with
this
offspring feel relaxed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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