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The bar chart illustrates the quantity of minutes of phone calls in three categories (local-landline, national and international-landline and mobiles) between
years
Suggestion
the years
 1995 and 2004 in Finland. Units are shown in millions. Overall, local-
landine
a telephone line that travels over terrestrial circuits
landline
 calls were same in both 1995 and 2004, while the amount of national and international-landline and
mobiles
Suggestion
mobile
 calls were
moderetaly
to a moderately sufficient extent or degree
moderately
 increased. On the one hand, at the beginning of the period, local-landline calls were
stood
Suggestion
standing
 at 12
million
. It started to increase gradually and reached the peak at approximately 17
million
 in 2001.
Subsequently
, it declined significantly from 17
million
 to 12 thousand between 2001 and 2004.
On the other hand
, these two categories
(
Accept space
(
national and international-landline and mobiles) increased over the period. National and international-landlines rose from 6
million
 to about 10
million
. In 1995, the amount of mobiles
were started
Suggestion
was started
 to increase steadily from nearly a half
million
, at the end of the period it reached less than 10
million
.
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