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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

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The use of social media has been i
ncreased
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increasing
over the past years. Most people have social media accounts now a day. Everyone c
ome
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comes
across marketing campaigns while scrolling through t
heir
objective case of they
them
n
ewsfeed,
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Newsfeed
 which can affect their decision to purchase s
ome
one or some or every or all without specification
any
product
. I completely agree with the given statement and
this
 essay will outline the reasons for my agreement. Primarily, people are spending most of their leisure time scrolling through the internet. While they are there to see new updates from friends and families, advertisements for different products
also
 appeared in the news feed or sometimes advertisements are being displayed on the side of s
creen
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the screen
continuously. Continuous display of a campaign, forces a person to open it, which ultimately make a person to buy a
product
 or service. A recent poll conducted by Stanford University suggested that up to 54 percent people that spend at least four hours a day on social platforms, purchased a
product
 because they saw its advertisement on social media.
Similarly
, campaigns on social platforms usually have a catch phrase or tag line. Advertisements circulated on social networks are very attractive and due to these tag lines, people tend to open them to acquire the details. M
ostly
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Most
companies are using marketing strategies that target audiences in a specific manner and make them believe that they need something,
although
 in reality, people do not require that
product
. A study published in Journal of marketing and business, concludes that almost 68% subjects bought a
product
 after seeing their advertisement on i
nternet
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the internet
because of the tag line or claim that it made. To conclude, social media marketing because of their attractive punch lines and as people are consuming l
ot
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a lot
of their time on social networks, does influence p
eople decision
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a person's decision
person's decision
peoples' decision
peoples decision
to buy different products and seemingly
this
 trend will increase in future.

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