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The chart outlines how frequently the individuals in USA feasted in quick nourishment eateries between 2003 and 2013

The chart outlines how frequently the individuals in USA feasted in quick nourishment eateries between 2003 and 2013
The chart outlines how frequently the
individuals
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 in
USA
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 feasted in quick
nourishment
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 eateries between 2003 and 2013 in terms of percentage of
individuals
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 and diverse frequencies of eating like each day, once a
week
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, a few times a
week
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, once or twice a month, few times a year and never. To start, in 2003, the greatest
number
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 of
individuals
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 that's 31% and the least that's 4 % consumed quick
nourishment
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 once a
week
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 and
everyday
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every day
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 respectively. There's a comparative trend in 2006. Around 33% and 3% ate quick
nourishment
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 once a
week
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 and
regular
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regularly
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 respectively. 33% devoured quick
nourishment
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 once or twice a month in 2013.
same
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a same
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number
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 of
individuals
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 have eaten quick
nourishment
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 each day in 2006 and 2013. The
number
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 of
individuals
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 who never ate quick
nourishment
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 was the highest in 2003 that accounted for 5%. 3% never ate quick
nourishment
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 in 2006 and 2013. The
number
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 of
individuals
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 who ate quick
nourishment
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few
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a few
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 times in a year in 2006 and 2013
were
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 the same.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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