One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

The medical world is constantly evolving and progressing. One of the results of

such

improvement is longevity and an increase in the average number of living years, I believe the positive points of

this

advancement is far greater than the drawbacks. Loosing loved ones

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are

extremely difficult and the depression that follows is unbearable and hard to overcome at times.

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Therefore

, during these troublesome periods, it is difficult to maintain a normal routine.

these

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days thanks

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days, thanks

to medical progress

this

issue has been reduced and the constant fear of someone’s passing has fortunately decreased. One of the other benefits of

this

development in medicine is the extended time we will have with the people around us. We will have the opportunity to learn about their past and experiences.

For example

, grandmas and grandpas are the sources of wisdom which we can apply to our own life.

On the other hand

, prolonging living years

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have

some negative points. One of them is the cost of financial support for seniors. Whether they live in

nursing homes or by

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nursing homes, or by

themselves, there will be a rise in fiscal responsibilities of government and individual households mainly because they will require special care as they age. Another negative impact is the growing number of the older population and a decrease in the

energetic

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energy

workforce.

even

used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected

Even

though some senior citizens are still able to work due to

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rising

rise

retirement age, but they may not be able to perform their duties as well as before.

For instance

, older people may have enough job

experiences

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experiences, however

however

as technology improves, it continues to be more difficult for them to keep up with advanced machines and

soft wares

(computer science) written programs or procedures or rules and associated documentation pertaining to the operation of a computer system and that are stored in read/write memory

softwares

. To conclude, the profits of advanced medical treatments lead to a raised lifespan. I believe

this

trend creates chances to take advantage of our predecessors’ knowledge and wisdom and spend more quality time with them.