Some people become famous at an early age. Is it bad or good? Discuss and give your opinion.

It is understandable why people consider taxes as
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a burden
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is due to the fact that these are significant deduction from their earnings. And because these are
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hard-earned monies from working, people believe they should keep these
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for their daily living expenses. While most of these
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deductions have
material impact
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a material impact
on our net pay, I believe that people still need to pay taxes as
contribution
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a contribution
to the state’s continuous progress and society’s comfortable living. One argument in support of abolishing the law of mandatory paying of taxes is that most of the
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officials tend to
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corrupt the funds
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of allocating it to certain projects that would benefit the nation.
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, in
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world countries, graft and corruption are so rampant that every
government
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position is being seized, not for the intention of public service but only for these officials’ own interest. People see that the reason of every
projects
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project
implemented by the
government
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were being overly funded by which most of the part of the budget are only being corrupted,
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of fully using it for the completion of a certain project.
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, witnessing the results of these kind of anomaly are evidently unjust for the people paying taxes.
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, there are more convincing arguments in
favor
promote over another
favour
of people’s obligation to pay the taxes according to their capability. That’s why there are
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laws & regulation by which the taxes are deducted based on the worker’s income bracket. Having said the unresolved corruption the
government
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has, projects involving public transportation, health, education, agriculture and commerce are certainly still needed for the survival of the community and of the whole nation. To fund these projects, most portion
are coming
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is coming
from worker’s
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contribution which are significant for the completion, especially if a country have no sufficient income sources like oil & gas in the Middle-east. If the budget would be
lessen
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lessened
because of not obliging people to pay
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tax
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taxes
, the society would likely suffer and living would be inconvenient for the majority. In conclusion, even though many are reluctant to lose some of their money due to
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,
I still consider that we still benefit on these as
well
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well, although
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we cannot feel the impact directly on us and we need to pay taxes.
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, living comfortably & peacefully in a community
can somehow impliedly states
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can somehow impliedly state
that these are
results
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the results
of the taxes we have paid.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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