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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Working for a single
company
 or multiple is
truely
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
 based on the individuals. Few people dedicating their
work
 to one organisation.
On the other hand
, there are still people think being employed in many companies
is
Suggestion
are
 better. If a
person
 wants to
work
 as
a
Suggestion
an
 employee throughout his life he must consider working in
same
Suggestion
the same company
company
.
In contrast
, a
person
 who looking for pare his
work
 and want to start a business
,
Accept space
,
his choice must be
work
Suggestion
working
worked
 in multiple organisation. Another primary thing is environment
,
Accept space
,
it has a 50
persent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of chance to change people's mindset or mood. The environment plays the major role rather than the
cash which
Accept comma addition
cash, which
 is paid by a
company
 to staff.
Work
permises
land and the buildings on it
premises
 really matters for each and every
employees
Suggestion
employee
, if it is not properly allocated or comfort
for
Suggestion
of
 workers, they may decide to change their employment. Most of the citizens
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that, how
much
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many
 years
contiuesly
at every point
continuously
 the staff is on the
company
, they might have that much of
chance
Suggestion
a chance
 to get promoted to
next level
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the next level
 and management will offer them a special treatment compared co-workers. The pervasive is a fallacy, indeed the
copacity
capability to perform or produce
capacity
 people will get
such
 kind of offers. It is
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 based on the vision of a
person
, some may want
safe and sequre life
Suggestion
a safe and secure life
safe and secure life
.
On the other hand
, there are still personalities who amenable to take calculated risk.
Jumpping different organisation
Suggestion
A Jumpping different organisation
The Jumpping different organisation
Jumpping different organisations
 can be a good source of
expoture
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposure
 to a
person
,
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of doing the routine
robo
a mechanism that can move automatically
robot
work
.
This
expoture
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposure
 will help the
person
 to become self
employer
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employed
, in spite of depending on others. The conclusion totally depends on
a
Suggestion
an
 individual and the family position of them. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will say getting
transfer
Suggestion
a transfer
 in multiple companies is good choice to get a large and worthy contact, but it is fully activated by a personal choice.

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