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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Working for a single
company
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 or multiple is
truely
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
 based on the individuals. Few people dedicating their
work
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 to one organisation.
On the other hand
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, there are still people think being employed in many companies
is
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are
 better. If a
person
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 wants to
work
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 as
a
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an
 employee throughout his life he must consider working in
same
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the same company
company
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.
In contrast
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, a
person
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 who looking for pare his
work
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 and want to start a business
,
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,
his choice must be
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work
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working
worked
 in multiple organisation. Another primary thing is environment
,
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,
it has a 50
persent
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percent
 of chance to change people's mindset or mood. The environment plays the major role rather than the
cash which
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cash, which
 is paid by a
company
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 to staff.
Work
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permises
land and the buildings on it
premises
 really matters for each and every
employees
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employee
, if it is not properly allocated or comfort
for
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of
 workers, they may decide to change their employment. Most of the citizens
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that, how
much
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many
 years
contiuesly
at every point
continuously
 the staff is on the
company
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, they might have that much of
chance
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a chance
 to get promoted to
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next level
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the next level
 and management will offer them a special treatment compared co-workers. The pervasive is a fallacy, indeed the
copacity
capability to perform or produce
capacity
 people will get
such
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 kind of offers. It is
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 based on the vision of a
person
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, some may want
safe and sequre life
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a safe and secure life
safe and secure life
.
On the other hand
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, there are still personalities who amenable to take calculated risk.
Jumpping different organisation
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A Jumpping different organisation
The Jumpping different organisation
Jumpping different organisations
 can be a good source of
expoture
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposure
 to a
person
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,
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of doing the routine
robo
a mechanism that can move automatically
robot
work
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.
This
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expoture
vulnerability to the elements; to the action of heat or cold or wind or rain
exposure
 will help the
person
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 to become self
employer
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employed
, in spite of depending on others. The conclusion totally depends on
a
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an
 individual and the family position of them. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will say getting
transfer
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a transfer
 in multiple companies is good choice to get a large and worthy contact, but it is fully activated by a personal choice.

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