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Social media is becoming increasingly popular among all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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Since the advancement of the Internet and Social Media, many people around the globe have achieved many benefits and by using that we can easily access any
information
, knowledge and even we are connecting people around the world. There is a debate that, is it necessary to share all the personal data
in
Suggestion
on
 the web?. Some may argue that it is not and some may say it is ok, but, we can not have a conclusion because of the advantages and disadvantages.
However
, it still has some negative impact that we should consider and
use
 it wisely.
First
 of all, we should know that Facebook is the biggest social media network in the world which has over 1 billion users using regularly. Many people from children to adults like to post, share all their memories, pictures and even their status in the social network. It's more fun when adding a
friend
 and keep in touch with people around the world.
For instance
, my
friend
 can easily know what I do and where I travel just simply browsing in a social network.
Nonetheless
, there's still a lot of disadvantages when sharing our content
such
 as daily routine, personal pictures or emotion status on it. People can easily
use
 your private
information
 to scam others or even you'll be the victim.
For example
, some people
use
 your identity to fake and scam money from others. Or they can
use
 your private
information
 to trade in the black market and even take control over your account. To conclude, In general, social media give us many benefits from connecting friends, enjoying happiness with your
friend
 at a far distance. But it should be careful about the public any private
information
 to the unknown person and ignore any strangers who want to be
friend
 with you. We should always take care of ourselves in order to avoid the traps.
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