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15 Traffic and housing problems are major cities could be solved by moving a large company and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extend, did you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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With the industrialization,
traffic
 congestion and lack of residences have become two top issues for local city governments in many metropolitans.
Therefore
, some persons relocating large companies or factories to rural regions may one of excellent strategies in order to settle these two issues. I definitely support
this
 suggestion and the essay will discuss my opinion.
To begin
 with, relocating larger firms and factories from inner cities will significantly relieve the burden on
traffic
 system. The
traffic
 volume will be reduced and
traffic
 jams may be prevented because thousands of employees will no longer need to commute to inner cities for their jobs daily.
As a result
,
traffic
 flow will become smooth there.
For example
, after the Edmonton International Airport has been relocated out of the downtown Edmonton,
traffic
  problem in the area has been improved significantly there for local residents in downtown Edmonton.
In addition
, shifting factories and larger companies away from urban areas will improve the quality of life for local residents by reducing air pollution and providing more spaces for residential housing and facilities.
For instance
, air pollution will be improved due to less vehicles on the inner roads and  the elimination of  toxic gas emitted from factories in inner cities. The local government will have more land spaces available to develop more residential buildings,  more shopping  malls and  parks, which  will contribute local economic development as well. In summary, the strategy of relocating large companies and factories from inner cities will improve the local residential living environment  by reducing
traffic
 volume.
Moreover
, the strategy
also
 enhances local economic prosperity by providing more spaces available for development of residential housing, shopping mall and parks.
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