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some people believe that eventually all the jobs will be replaced by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

#people #jobs #robots
Rapid growth of artificial intelligence throughout the world is quite impressive and it seems like AI robots are going to replace human jobs very soon.
however
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However
, some jobs will always require human intervention in them.
This
 essay will discuss why AI can't take over human jobs completely.
with
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With
 the recent development in technology and specifically in AI, everything which involves manual efforts are moving towards automation. Regressive jobs which do not require human brain, calculations and analyses are easily replaceable by robots. Managers would
prefare
like better; value more highly
prefer
 to train a model one time
instead
 of hiring people, polish their skills and go through a number of steps. Some of the key examples
for
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of
this
 would be chat bots trained for customer support services and robots used in restaurants for catering services. These
type
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types
 of jobs do not require any science and complex strategies,
its
the thing named or in question
it
 involves one time training and repetition of same work
everyday
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every day
.
Although
 Robots are beneficial for replacing the boring and repetitive work, there are a lot of jobs which are impossible without humans. Activities that involve human brain, senses and observatory analysis
can not
can not
cannot
 be done by a robot through training. One of the
example
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examples
 for the above would be in the field of medicine. Diagnoses of illness cannot be
determine
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determined
 via any algorithm or programming,
instead
 it requires human touch and skills to figure out and treat the illness. To conclude, it is most likely that machine will replace most of the
jobs but
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jobs, but
 there will always be scope for complicated job which requires human-specific abilities and they can never be replaced.

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