Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

From the inception of human civilization, we are using the nature of our own cause to enrich our establishment more and more and the nature broke its taciturn mode for the
last
few centuries with
different form
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different forms
a different form
of calamities. To solve the issues regarding
this
, world leaders come up very
often but
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often, but
there
are
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is
always debate on the honest intention of developed countries who are more responsible for
this
worse condition.
Therefore
, a debate is relevant whether the environmental problem should be solved on a global scale or to deal nationally.
Firstly we
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Firstly, we
should think about our environment as whole and every part of which can be situated in different countries but are connected to each other. Research says, a significant change in Amazon forest has
specific effect
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a specific effect
in desert in Saudi Arabia.
Moreover
, we can say
,
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,
with rising temperature around the world
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of pollution, Ice of
north pole
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the north pole
is melting and
that is
raising the sea
level which
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level, which
causes countries located nearby seaside as
such
maldives
a group of about 1,200 small coral islands (about 220 inhabited) in the Indian ocean
Maldives
are to be exposed
with
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to
the risk of going under water. For that reason, environmental problems should be dealt
on
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with
cooperation of all countries.
However
, Initiatives of solving the environmental issues should be started from home or from
national arena
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the national arena
as that will give more relevant and direct solution to the issue.
For example
, cities like Delhi and Dhaka are overpopulated and are not being maintained with proper care.
Therefore
, the environment of the cities
are becoming
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is becoming
polluted
alarmingly
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alarm
that the sky around these turn
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
black. To solve the issues, the Government of the countries should take required initiatives. In my opinion, environmental issues like carbon emission and rising
temperature which
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temperature, which
have vast and long consequences should be handled on
global scale but
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a global scale, but
a global scale but
issues like planning and maintaining healthy cities within
national barrier
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the national barrier
should be executed
nationally
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nations
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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