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Prison is the best way of punishment. Give your opinion.

#prison #punishment
The alarming rates at which various crimes are increasing across the globe really startles us to a very great extent. The kind of crimes committed these days are so grave that it sends down a shiver through the spine for many. But there are definitely many better ways to help them overcome their deeds other than sending them behind bars. Most criminals who end up doing various types of crimes are mostly unstable mentally. Putting
such
 people in a prison will not only leave them solitary and
depreesed but
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depressed, but
depressed but
also
 do no good to them eventually. What we ideally should push for is sending
such
 criminals to correction centres where the challenge they face is rectified as per the kind of mindsets they have. If we can provide these people with the right correction therapy to strengthen their minds,
then
 these very people will become good Samaritans of the country they live in.
Therefore in
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Therefore, in
 my opinion, rather than
inprisionment
, we should work on correcting their thinking habits and behaviour to help them lead a successful life.

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