The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the annual average
precipitation
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per month in 5 cities
namely
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Hongkong
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Hong Kong
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, Tokyo,
Jakarta
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, Cairo, and London. The scale is in
mm
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.
Overall
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,
Jakarta
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has the highest monthly average
rainfall
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,
while
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in
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apply
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Cairo
is
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the lowest in comparison with other cities. In the first quarter of the year, the average
precipitation
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in
Jakarta
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was 300
mm
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per month, which started to decrease in March to 21. The average monthly
rainfall
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in
Jakarta
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and
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was steadily falling till August and reached 60
mm
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. From September to
December
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December,
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there were dramatic
jump
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, 70 and 210
respectively
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. At the beginning of the period, monthly
precipitation
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was 24mm, which
was rising
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rose
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with geometrical progression to August to 380
mm
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. After that, it
was
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significantly
decreasing
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and reached 34mm in December. The average monthly
rainfall
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in Tokyo showed the most
precipitation
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in the summer months, where it was in the range
150
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of 150
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mm
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and 190
mm
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,
while
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in the winter monthly
rainfall
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was about 50
mm
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. The average
rainfall
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in Cairo was about 3-4
mm
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,
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it reached its peak in August (27
mm
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). The
precipitation
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in London was without significant fluctuation in the range between 45
mm
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and 80
mm
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per month.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words precipitation, jakarta, mm, rainfall with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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