Health services are a basic necessity. However, private companies have made them quite costly for ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh its disadvantages?
Mankind has two general types of needs, necessary and not urgent. One of the most fundamental needs is
health
care services
. Nevertheless
, non-governmental institutes have turned it to be expensive for normal citizens. This
essay will extend the benefits and drawbacks of it with a weighing them at the end
.
It is obvious that applying more charges to necessary services
, on the one hand, is one undeniable drawback of independent clinics and hospitals
. Although
private places
such
as hospitals
are known to rich people
, sometimes using equipment in these places
is unavoidable for patients so this
costs an unaffordable expenditure to low-incomers. For example
, heart surgeries require cutting-edge technology and not having time to wait to receive vital blood exam results, are reasons people
have to use private health
services
which are too expensive for them. Therefore
, costly services
for basic needs could have disadvantages for poor people
.
Conversely
, the advantage of non-profit hospitals
should not be overlooked, on the other hand
, they bring a lot of benefits to societies. Reducing pressure from public health
care places
by absorbing rich patients to private hospitals
and providing the most updated tools and methods to all individuals who have to travel to other places
for them, for instance
. Regarding non-estate health
services
in terms of cost like other private places
( schools, gyms and others) is not right, this
is due to
the life is humans' the wealthiest wealth, and if there are no suitable life-saving tools, humans will travel to other places
to save their lives with spending more money even the poorest ones. Finally
, facilities always have advantages even if they are private.
In conclusion, charging more money to low-income people
unwillingly by independent health
services
is regarded as a disadvantage, although
bringing more advantages like saving their lives can show private clinics and hospitals
' benefits outweigh its disadvantages.Submitted by aliaghanjd74 on
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task achievement
Your essay successfully presents both the advantages and disadvantages of private health care, but some points lack clarity and could be elaborated further.
task achievement
Ensure your ideas are clearly explained and well-supported by relevant examples. For example, strengthen the point about expensive treatments by providing more specific data or scenarios.
coherence cohesion
Your essay structure is logical, but it could benefit from clearer transitions between ideas to improve flow and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using convoluted sentences which could obscure your main points. Simpler, more direct sentences often enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame your discussion.
task achievement
You have raised valid points regarding the impact of private health services on low-income individuals and society overall.
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