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Some people think that government should subsidize fruits and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argue that text should be set on on healthy food. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Government is the caretaker of the country. It is mandatory to have a healthy lifestyle. At the same time,
authorities
Suggestion
the authorities
 should
also
 avoid putting text on on healthy
food
.
This
 essay will discuss on both the sides with my opinion, with the reasons and its appurtenant examples.
To begin
 with comma it is the responsibility of the citizen to eat healthy
food
. Subsidizing fruits and vegetables, can be only done if these are produced in the geographical boundaries.
For instance
, giving subsidize fruits and vegetables can help low class families.
also if
Accept comma addition
Also, if
Also if
 people will start consuming healthy
food
, the revenue level will
also
 increase.
Conversely
 coma government should not put text on on healthy
food
, because of
this
, they will get
demotivated
 to produce
such
 foods.
Also
 coma due to the habitats, the chances of unemployment will
also
 increase because of no demand of the
food
 in the market.
fast
Suggestion
Fast
food
 is easy to get and tasty to consume applying text will bring negative effects.
For instance
, if the tax
are being applied
Suggestion
is being applied
on
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to
 fast
food
 restaurants, people will prefer to have
food
 at their home, and the restaurants will start making losses. As per my opinion, government should only provide
subsidize
Suggestion
subsidized
 healthy
food
 because, it will help the people to have a better lifestyle, but bureaucrats should not apply heavy tax on healthy
food
 because of having
man
Suggestion
a man
men
 in disadvantages, which are already mentioned in the above paragons. In conclusion, by putting down my pen, providing healthy subsidised
food
 is the key for the lock, rather than applying
tax
Suggestion
a tax
 on on unhealthy restaurants.
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