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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some extend of
freedom
 is required to express
artists
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artists'
 creativity, whereas many people claim that artists should have complete liberty to articulate their thoughts and notions. In my opinion while
freedom
in
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of
 expression is important, art should be censored if it contains the elements that hurt to
society
, beliefs and religions. Art is a powerful form of
communication and
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communication, and
 artists play a crucial role in the development of our
society
 by novel ideas, opinions and criticisms in the form of pictures, writings, music and films. Artists use their imagination to write novels that later inspire movies, and some science fiction books and movies give new ideas to scientists.
Moreover
, artistic
freedom
 helps to criticize new decisions and lead to change by
government
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the government
 in a healthy way.
For instance
, Guemica, a well-known oil painting, painted by Pablo
picasoo
prolific and influential Spanish artist who lived in France (1881-1973)
Picasso
, that refers to the city bombed in the Spanish civil war,
as a result
, it becomes an anti war symbol and reminder of
tragedies
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the tragedies
 of war.
In
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On
 the other hand, a total
freedom
 without any restriction is detrimental
for
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to
society
. Art can extremely affect
in
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on
 people's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
For instance
, in 1997 one music in Turkey, lead to the suicide of three people. Quite
liberty
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liberating
 in music lyrics, or movies that contain the harmful
scence
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
scene
 is not a good idea, because using of some sentences
such
 as encourage people to drink alcohol or
smoking
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smoke
 cigarette could be hurt the young people in
particularly
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particular
 children. In conclusion, art, as an effective subject in
society
, should be limited. Censorship of some detrimental things
on
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about
 people, in every form of art, is necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • creativity
  • freedom of expression
  • innovative
  • ethical considerations
  • societal morals
  • unregulated
  • provoke thought
  • controversy
  • government regulation
  • censorship
  • diverse perspectives
  • artistic expression
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