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The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is now some time since the whole universe was involved in one war. The
world
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 nowadays is no comparison to the past, when millions of soldiers were lost on the battlefield. As the
world
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 today is significantly safer than previously, it can be argued that governments should stop spending large amounts of
money
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 on their military forces. I agree that governments should not spend abundant
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 on the military. The
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World
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 War dates back nearly seventy years and, since 1945, no
conflict
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 have taken place in western countries.
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, people have suggested that spending
money
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 on necessities within society
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 of the armed forces is more useful.
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,
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 is very difficult, as even though no significant
conflict
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 has taken place in western countries, they are still involved in the conflicts of other countries.
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, the US contribution in the Iraqi war has only recently ended. For
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 involvement of military forces in foreign lands, countries still need to have strong armed forces, in case they are needed. In some countries like the UK, the military is already significantly weaker than it has been in the past.
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, historically, a hundred years is not that long and because no
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 happened recently,
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 does not mean that there will be no
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 in the future. At the outbreak of
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 War Two, the UK was seriously under-prepared, as it had been thought that the horrors of
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 War One had convinced everyone of the uselessness of war. In conclusion, certain armed forces are necessary for major countries at least to protect their people, even though the
world
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 is safer than a hundred years ago. They might need to intervene in conflicts in other countries and
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 peace is by no means assured for the future.
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, It is advisable to the authorities not to allocate abundant
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 to have armed forces.
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