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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people
Museums become a part of
life's
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life
 style in the model society. Some people believe that charging of
entrance
 fee for
running museums
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running, museums
 is a good way to keep museums grained a stable fund. Other people tend to express that the charging may bring some bad effects to the public. Personally, I prefer to suggest the former idea of
this
 issue. Running a
museum
 needs a lot of money to pay the daily routines
such
 as salary of employment, the cost of maintaining, water bills, and electric bills. The income from charging
entrance
 is a stable and reasonable fund to the
museum
. Compared to the free
entrance
of
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to
 museums, the museums which charging tickets, usually exhibit higher value of
art product
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the art product
. People will get a better experience when the
museum
 running well. A disadvantage for charging in museums is that people may feel expensive to go to museums. According to the report from UWA, the satisfaction experience in museums is highly regarded to the products of exhibitions, but less related to the charging.
Moreover
, if the
museum
 lost a stable funding, it will cut off the budget to keep
routines job
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a routine's job
routine's job
the routine's job
routine job
,
then
 the quality of exhibitions will drop And people will interest less to go to the
museum
. In conclusion, charging an
entrance
 fee
to
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for
 people going to museums is a better way to keep museums running well. I believe that the charging
is not keep
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doesn't keep
does not keep
 people away from museums, but only make museums better and valued.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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