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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose solutions you think would be effective.

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Nowadays, illegal activities done by youth tend to increase in most part of the world. It appears that there are several reasons behind, which can be remedied by certain actions authorities and employers can take. The
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 factor to introduce here is that organizations are keen to hire workers having more experience
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in
 their field regardless of the skill the young person has.
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 is not the case for the young who seek income and
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 a need for money might
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stir
 up a young man to commit a crime.
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, it can be seen from the statistics where
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the employment rate
employment rates
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younger
 people (15-24) is usually lower than that of middle aged adults. Another underlying cause comes into sight that they were not taught vital classes regarding the law and the rule when they were
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 secondary school.
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, perpetrating offence is mostly related to defendant’s personal characteristics rather than social status. There are effective solutions to note concerning these problems.
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, apparent step would be to pump money into youth’s education. After
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, the conviction rate among the young is sure to be decreased because
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the correlation coefficient
 between education level and standard of living is relatively high.
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 essential remedy might be for the employer to ask flexible requirements, not only experience, from the candidates.
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, the probability for young people who have not yet worked for
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 organizations to be selected tends to be boosted. In conclusions, the factors of lack of knowledge about legal act and unclear selection criteria regarding the gap in experience seem to be crucial causes. A collaborated reaction by The governments, the companies, and the young individuals might lessen the severity of the issue.

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