In spite of advantage made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadats
Suggestion
Nowadays
, many countries had been
tried
Suggestion
trying
to develop the advances items to solve the lack of
food
in the
world
by the way why many people around the
world
still go hungry. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think "
captialism
an economic system based on private ownership of capital
capitalism
". Under "the
world
order" by
USA
Suggestion
the USA
in 1970 (the cold war) divided the
countris
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
country
counties
around the
world
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
3 groups, 1) the
first
world
like USA
,
Accept space
,
UK
,
Accept space
,
Japan like
taht
pointing out something
that
Tate
tat
, 2) the
second
word was like Soviet union and 3) the
third
word was a
devopling
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
countries
Suggestion
country
. I didn't think the
captialism
an economic system based on private ownership of capital
capitalism
is bad,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think it made many
problem
Suggestion
problems
such
as the lack of
food
in the poor countries. According to the Economics, the
develped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
countries have
a
Suggestion
an
absolute
rights
Suggestion
right
to take an
adventage
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
from
Suggestion
of
the
resouse
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
in the
develping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
countries with the lowest wage, the hardest working and the dangerous places
working
Accept comma addition
working, hence
hence
, the people who live in the
devepling
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
countries has no
oppunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
to
moblisation
Suggestion
mobilize
mobilization
their status.
the
Suggestion
The
lowest wage they get vice versa the high price of their item
product
Accept comma addition
product, for
for example
1 dollar US per a day for 1 worker in the
develped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
countries, but 100 dollar US per the item product to be
selled
disposed of to a purchaser
sold
, the cap is approximate 99
dollar
Suggestion
dollars
US goes to the owner who live in the developed countries. The solve of
this
problem
, I think the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
on
Suggestion
of
in
each
countries
Suggestion
country
should
guranted
Suggestion
grant
granted
guaranteed
their citizen to have a basic rights,
food
, clear water and Education,
for example
. The highest price of
food
that
restrize
return to its original or usable and functioning condition
restores
the poor people to access the
food
, the government need to bare the barrier
pices
a separate part of a whole
pieces
prices
pics
of
food
won't be high. In the long team of solving
this
problem
, the government will give more Education fee
as
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
free for
thie
definite article
the
civilan
associated with civil life or performed by persons who are not active members of the military
civilians
becaus
for the reason that; on account of
because
I absolutely think Education comes with mobilisation the social status when the people has a high Education comes with a hire in a high working.
then
Suggestion
Then
the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should bare the fee of
household
Suggestion
the household
is not high as well.
the
Suggestion
The
people will be expenditure more. When the more expenditure the people have, the more money they
have we
Accept comma addition
have, we
have to solve
this
problem
together, Not the duty of some countries, the
problem
will be eradicated from the wild.
fainally we
Accept comma addition
Finally, we
Finally we
Fainally we
have to have a hope to solve it, Not despair yet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancements
  • pervasive
  • uneven distribution
  • logistical challenges
  • economic barriers
  • post-harvest losses
  • affluent societies
  • climate change
  • exacerbates
  • food insecurity
  • crop yields
  • political instability
  • sustainable agricultural practices
  • food waste
  • management practices
  • consumer awareness
  • international cooperation
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