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Experience is the key factor for becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor
Lots of people think that
experience
 is a crucial point for booming. To a certain extent, I agree that
experience
 is important.
However
, I
also
 believe that knowledge is much more superior factor. On the one hand, I confess that
experience
 is necessary. Employers want to hire experienced employees. They think that, these workers will promote their company's achievements.
For example
, we all need experienced doctors, lawyers, teachers and etc.
for
Suggestion
For
 fully trusting them. If employers hire
unexperienced
having experience; having knowledge or skill from observation or participation
experienced
 workers, they might to get
failed
(usually followed by 'with' or used as a combining form) generously supplied with
filled
 in the future.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that knowledge is much more necessary part of what we do.
Firstly
, we need initial basic knowledge about our job, just what to do or how thing work.
For example
, it is important for mechanical engineers
to know
Suggestion
know
 where he or she must put the bolts or why shock
absorbes
(physics) material in a nuclear reactor that absorbs radiation
absorbers
absorber
 is important for cars.
Secondly
, theoretical knowledges are important and undeniable factors for some professions.
For example
, if language teachers do no know theoretical parts of the language, they cannot teach students what is wrong or what is true about grammar. In conclusion, while I confess that
experience
 certainly main factor for employers on booming, I do not believe that
experience
is crucial point
Suggestion
is a crucial point
 to
concider
deem to be
consider
. Knowledge has
more significant impact
Suggestion
a more significant impact
.
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