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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Transactions are trackable convenient if no cash available

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Nowadays, In many countries, most of the users tend to use online payment
apps
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 to purchase every small thing and build a cashless society. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss
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 development and give my personal opinion. On the one hand, By using these online
apps
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 we can save time without waiting for the shopkeeper to give us change or
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 leftover money with the help of these easy transactions.
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, there are more security features of paying online because they provide us with trackable payments,
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 the data, and two-step authentication.
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, In Manchester ,
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 a survey in 2024, it
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 found that many people across the world are using these online payments because
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 it are safe and secure.
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, there are some drawbacks to using
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 method.
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, they are network dependable if there is no network in the area, they cannot
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 well and should face some struggles.
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, there are security risks in transferring online most websites and
apps
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 are fake these days and there can be problems like phishing, hacking and cracking.
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,
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 is considered as a problem.
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, in California, a survey was conducted and found that it is better to carry cash
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 of searching for
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 way when you are traveling to a non-network area.
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, In my opinion, the benefits and drawbacks are equally weighted of using UPI
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 it is better to use them when there is a good network and sometimes we should
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 carry cash to avoid those misconceptions.
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