16. Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, sports competitions have become so popular around the world for the entertainment purpose. Meanwhile, commercial advertisement companies spend a huge amount of salary to invite famous sports celebrities to promote sport products via advertisements. Some people believe that

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Topic Vocabulary:

endorsement
influence
credibility
reputation
globalize
brand image
penetrate markets
role model
participation
high costs
premium pricing
overshadow
product features
consumer trust
reputation risk
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16. Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Your opinion

Learning English is important. Do you agree or disagree ?

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disgree.

Some people consider prices as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?