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Describe a good law in your country. What is it about? How do you come to know about it? Explain why you think that it is a good law.

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As a Canadian citizen, I am wa
re o
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
f some excellent laws which ensure social justice and human rights and provide th
e safe living environment t
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a safer living environment
safer living environment
o
i
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for
ts residents. Here, I would like to talk about a significant
law
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, anti-smoking
law
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. It bans smoking in public place and indoor as well. There is pre-set smoking zone in certain public places,
such
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 as in ai
rport.
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airports
I came to know about
this
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law
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 when I wa
s watching T
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watched
V at the moment when the
law
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 wa
s just effective.
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was just as effective
There are ad
vertisement o
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advertised
f the anti-smoking
law
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 ev
ery where i
to or in any or all places
everywhere
n public places.
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, in transport stations or inside public transport vehicles,
such
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 as taxi, subways., shopping mall, media centres, theatres, schools, colleges and other public places. The anti-smoking
law
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 is one of be
st l
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the best
aws in Canada and many Canadian support
this
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law
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.
Firstly
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, Smoking is a bad habit and will cause addition so that smokers have to waste lots of money in
b
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on
uying cigarettes. sm
oking w
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Smoking
ill bring negative impact not only to smokers themselves but
also
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 to people nearby.
Second
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-hand smoke
also
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 has si
milar negative impact t
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a similar negative impact
o people’s health as well. The
second
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-hand smoke
al
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so place p
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also places
has also placed
is also placing
eople at high risk to gain lung cancer and other cancers as well. Banning smoking in public will promote public health. Because of these reasons, anti-smoking
law
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 in Canada is a good
law
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.
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