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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Tourisim industry
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The tourism industry
Tourism industry
 has grown at a
tremondous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
tremendous
 rate and has been the backbone of the
conomy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
 in some countries for many years. In fact, some citizens believe that increasing fees for non-residents should be implemented in accordance to the growing trend.
However
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, as far as I am concerned, I
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 disagree
withthis
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with this
 view as it will only create hindrance rather than a friendly approach. Admittedly, many people
only travels
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only travel
 and explore a specific country once or twice in
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 lifetime. It is certain that trips are quite expensive and I personally believe that fair or just prices are a huge factor in choosing a destination.
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, few countries
offers
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offer
 a fixed rate for all their site tours,
inexceptions
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in exceptions
 to whether these tour packages were purchased
inside
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in
 the country or internationally. Conveying an equal treatment
amongest
in division, with shares to each
amongst
 guests and locals
agreably
in an enjoyable manner
agreeably
 holds a strong foundation towards hospitality aside from economic benefits.
Moreover
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, frequent visitors those who are satisfied with the pristine beauty, budget friendly and historic value of an attraction are more likely to recommend places to other groups and family members.
Also
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,
this
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 will benefit everyone in terms of greater financial opportunities and international acknowledgments later on. In conclusion, I strongly believe that charging tourists at higher prices will potentially remove the
possiblity
a future prospect or potential
possibility
 of
new comers
any new participant in some activity
newcomers
 to experience a
particualr
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
 landmark.
This
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 is
undoubtly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
 one of the main concerns for all travellers around the world.
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