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consumer goods have become the most important part of human lives. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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consumerism
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Consumerism
 is social and economic ideology that encourages people to acquire more products and service in on ever increasing
amount
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amounts
. It is incontrovertible fact that the given topic assert that the consumers good have
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lot
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lots
 of merits for the
humans
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human
 beings outweigh the demerits. In
this
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 essay, I am going to examine
this
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 question from both points of view.
on
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On
 one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits of considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
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 is that the
consumers
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consumer
consumers'
 goods are very beneficial for the economic growth and development for the country. It is
also
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 possible to say that if the people
buy the
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buy, the
 more thing in the market and they
pay the
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pay, the
 more money on
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things
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thing
, in
this
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 way the economy is
boost
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boosted
.
Last
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 but not least, the consumers good shows the life style of the people and they
live
go away from a place
leave
 the better living standard. One good illustrated shows that after
few years
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a few years
 people have no more
choices but
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choices, but
 now they have lots of things they buy the those things which has
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lot
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lots
 of features and facilities, in
this
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 way people show their living standard.
On the other hand
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, it is
also
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 possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that it has some
demrits
a mark against a person for misconduct or failure; usually given in school or armed forces
demerits
 the people waste the
lot
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 of money to buy the
counsmers
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
goods whereas
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goods, whereas
, they mostly buy the those things, which is not useful for
person
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people
persons
a person
the person
. A particularly good example here nowadays we saw
Use synonyms
lot
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lots
 of
adveristement
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 which influence the people to buy the things like the fair creams, they buy
this
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 type of products which do not
affectful
producing or capable of producing an intended result or having a striking effect
effectual
 on their skin in
this
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 way, the lost the
lot
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 of money.
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, when the new product launch in the market people
throw
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throws
 the old things it create the pollution and
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the health
for example
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 the plastic. As we have seen, there one number of
answer
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answers
 to
this
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 question. On
believe
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believe, however
however
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, I trend to believe that the consumer goods has
lot
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 of advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Furthermore
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, It is said that earth can
satisfied
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satisfy
 everybody
need but
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need, but
 not
everybody
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everybody's
 greed.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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