Some people think that private schools have many advantages while others think there have many drawbacks for the community. Discuss both sides and give an opinion
These days, private
schools
are gaining popularity in terms of student choices to study. Use synonyms
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some argue that private Linking Words
schools
are considered to have a lot of benefits impact, others claim that it has a damaging effect on society. It is my belief that the advantages of going to private Use synonyms
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outweigh its disadvantages for the following reasons.
On the one hand, private Use synonyms
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have been chosen by students mainly because of the curriculum they are offered. Subjects Use synonyms
such
as specific musical instruments (e.g. guitar and piano) and theatre are not included in most public Linking Words
schools
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therefore
these majors could attract many youngsters to choose private Linking Words
schools
in order to enhance their ability in both academic and non-academic skills. Use synonyms
For example
, one private school in Indonesia has succeeded in making musician because their primary subject is music.
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On the other hand
, private Linking Words
schools
cost much higher fees rather than public Use synonyms
schools
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For instance
, in Indonesia, private Linking Words
schools
are excluded from receiving money from the government since it has their own curriculum which is mostly international based. To fund those fees, they have to charge more in the registration fee, Use synonyms
hence
it could lead people to consider public Linking Words
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as Use synonyms
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that are only for the rich.
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strongly believe that the learning process offered by private Change the capitalization
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schools
can promise a successful career for students in the future. Use synonyms
However
, parents have to deal with fees demanded by the school in order to obtain the outstanding result of the student.Linking Words
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Ensure a balanced discussion of both viewpoints before expressing your opinion.
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Vary sentence structures to enhance readability and demonstrate language proficiency.
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Consider developing your conclusion further by summarizing both sides of the argument more distinctly before stating your final standpoint.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay presents a clear structure, making it easy for the reader to follow your ideas.
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You've effectively utilized specific examples to support your points, which enriches your argument.