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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #lives
It is undeniable that the span of life is changing day by day and year by year.
Although
 some people still believe that past days are better, I would argue that the technological advancements and the development of countries are essential factors in making their lives better.
To begin
 with, one of the most critical factors for seeking better lives is technology. The reason behind
this
 is that it has a significant role in making life faster and more convenient than ever before.
For instance
, people have not been able to send a letter within a couple of seconds as emails do, and they have to wait weeks and sometimes months until it received.
In contrast
, if
this
 letter included critical information was delayed or even lost, people would get lost and frustrated as well.
Furthermore
, nowadays, the development of countries is essential to obtain a decent lifestyle. Developed countries around the globe always have plans, whether for education, health, transportation and their aim are to see their citizens live in an appropriate life. To illustrate, the Canadian Government had recently established a new way for harvesting crops. Farmers in Canada are suffering from the bad weather almost all of the year that make it impossible for them to grow up, and by
this
 way, the government is still searching for possible ways to make it easier for their people to live.
In contrast
, if
this
 has not happened
by
Suggestion
with
 the Canadian’s authorities, people would struggle in growing their crops. To conclude,
this
 is my view that technology and development are vital factors for making people live in a decent way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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