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Some people fails in school, but ends up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is important things to succeed in life?

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In our word today there are several possibilities to people become successful, even if there
are fails
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are failing
failing
fail
have failed
 in school. But it's not always true way to succeed, while there can be a variety of factors that can lead to it.
Firstly
, I do believe that every successful
people
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person
 in
live
Suggestion
life
 needs proper education. Which is very crucial. School is one of the main components of human life, without which there is no way to
succeess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
.
Secondly
, the knowledge gained there, provides a strong base of where the future personality grows and it is a
misconceptions
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misconception
 that success will come without any effort. That means, every great job
need
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needs
 a hard
work
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work, although
although
 which demands a lot of attention.
On the other hand
, sometimes occurs stories about people who reached the highest points even if they faced a failure in school. But
such
 cases are very unique and rare. Because
this
 is a one in a million chance to be in
such
 circumstances, when people are lucky and talented enough to be in the right place at the right time.
For example
, like having a specific inborn knowledge about aspect of building a prosperous business or skills that may be beneficial at work. Like good memory, cope with multitasking problems or good quality of working with the group and etc. In conclusion, I suggest that education is always the main step to success, even if the way to it different for everyone and lack of it makes
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 very difficult to achieve any goals.

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