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17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

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As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar. Some people believe that
team
work
 will boost individual cognitive capacity
growth
.
However
, I agree with them under certain conditions. The essay will discuss my agreement with
this
 view and
also
 list my opinion against it.
To begin
 with, it is a truth that
team
work
 will boost the
growth
 of cognitive intelligence and wisdom in the certain conditions. If a 
team
 consists of cooperative members with attitudes of willing to learn together, it will enhance their individual
knowledge
growth
. There is a Chinese saying, " In a group of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them." During
team
work
, 
team
 members will contribute their individual
knowledge
 due to their various educational backgrounds, personal experiences and individual ideas. People may learn new concepts or
knowledge
 during
team
work
, which may not be learned from books or limited personal experience.
Therefore
, during 
team
work
, people are able to practice their cognitive skills so that they will become mo
re smarter. 
Suggestion
smarter
 On the contrast, in certain situation,
team
work
 may diminish the opportunities for
team
 member's cognitive improvement.
For instance
, it is a tough task for
team
 members who
work
 together with opposite views in religions or politics.
Therefore
, in
this
 condition,
team
work
 will create conflict and it is a challenging task for each member to reach the same agreement.
This
 will distort participants' thought rather than helping them to obtain
knowledge
. In
this
 condition,
team
work
 might affect the participants' intelligence
growth
.  In conclusion,
team
 activity may not always contribute to the
growth
 of
team
 member's cognitive skills. Whether
team
work
 will enhance the
growth
 of an individual's intelligence will depend on many aspects of
team
 members,
such
 as personal values, religion and attitude as well. I personally agree that the majority of
team
work
 will help the participants to obtain
knowledge
 and become wiser.
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