IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

17. Some people think that a persons improve their intellectual skills more when doing a group activity. To what extend do you agree.

#people #persons #skills #group #activity
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
As we all know, it is a long journey for a person to become a scholar. Some people believe that
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 will boost individual cognitive capacity.
However
Linking Words
, I agree with them under certain conditions. The essay will discuss my agreement with
this
Linking Words
 view and
also
Linking Words
 list my opinion against it.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, it is a truth that
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 will encourage the
growth
Use synonyms
 of cognitive intelligence and wisdom as long as all members are willing to cooperate together. If a 
team
Use synonyms
 consists of all members with attitudes of willing to learn together, it will enhance their individual knowledge
growth
Use synonyms
. There is a Chinese saying, " In a group of people with more than three individuals, there is always a teacher among them." During
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
, members will contribute the
team
Use synonyms
 in terms of  their various educational backgrounds, personal experiences and individual ideas. People may learn new concepts during
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
, which may not be learned from books or limited personal experience.
Therefore
Linking Words
, people have opportunities to practice their cognitive skills,
such
Linking Words
 as logical thinking skills, expressing skills and summarizing skills, so that they become smarter via
team
Use synonyms
 activity. On the contrast, in some certain situations,
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 may diminish the opportunities for the members' cognitive improvement.
For instance
Linking Words
, it is a tough task for
team
Use synonyms
 members who
work
Use synonyms
 together with opposite views in religions or politics.
Therefore
Linking Words
, in
this
Linking Words
 condition,
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 may create conflict and it is a challenging task for each member to reach the same agreement.
This
Linking Words
 will distort participants' thought rather than helping them to obtain knowledge. In
this
Linking Words
 condition,
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 might affect the participants' intelligence
growth
Use synonyms
.  In conclusion,
team
Use synonyms
 activity may not always contribute to the
growth
Use synonyms
 of
team
Use synonyms
 member's cognitive skills. Whether
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 will enhance the
growth
Use synonyms
 of an individual's intelligence will depend on many aspects of
team
Use synonyms
 members,
such
Linking Words
 as personal values, religion and attitude as well. I personally agree that the majority of
team
Use synonyms
work
Use synonyms
 will help the participants to obtain knowledge and become wiser.
Submitted by busybee1693 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: