Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Every person in the world wants to take a decision on his own and so does the children.
Although
a section of people argues that the young should not be allowed to make an opinion own their own as it may lead to self-centric society, the other section of the people encourages adolescences to take decision on things that affect them.
This
essay will discuss why children should be allowed to make decision on personal matters but with some restrictions. The society is composed of various age groups, preference of each group may be different. As all the fingers are not equal, the personal opinions, behaviours and preferences
are
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also vary
are also varied
also
vary.
However
, social decorum can be
maintain
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maintained
if some basic rules are followed.
For instance
,
old
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older
adults do not like loud music but juvenile love loud music. If we don't teach
this
manner to our young
then
this
may lead to social disturbance.
Hence
, allowing every child to do as per his likeness every time will lead to adverse effect in the society.
However
, the minds of the young are very curious; they are eager to learn several
thing
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things
and experience on their own. If a child is given
upper hand
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the upper hand
to perform activity own his own, he may be able to learn more quickly.
For example
, in drawing class, when a young is given free access to paint whatever he wants, he can express his likeness on the particular form of drawing art, say animal art. If young one is
bounded
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bound
to draw abstract art which is not his natural preference, his mind may be
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
due to pressure. To conclude,
although
allowing children to perform as per their choices has few merits, the supervision of children's doing is
also
the most important to balance the social decorum.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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