Nowadays people get married and have kids in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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These days’ marriage after thirties and having kids in these ages is becoming a trend, while many believe it is a frown upon trend, I firmly believe

this

way of living can lead to a happy

life

and its benefits outweigh drawbacks. Giving birth at older mothers could leave some unwanted disorder for both mothers and infants. It has been approved, pregnancy in

matures might

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matures, might

cause some serious illness and have profound

effects especially

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effects, especially

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infants, actually the number of dying infants among older parents

are

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drastically more than younger one,

also

the number of children who have the down syndrome is higher in these

period

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periods

life

Moreover

huge age difference

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the huge age difference

between parents and kids, can be an issue in their upbringing because they maybe fell less like minded, etc. Having appropriate accommodations and occupations, make

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stable condition for people

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their thirties.

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has been proved that, individuals in

this

ages pass their both social and occupational infancy, so they have job security and are able to cope with the cost of living included bills, rent, etc. And are ready to transition, because marriage and having toddlers, definitely is a milestone in peoples

life

and appropriate income can be

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splendid support for every family.

Also people

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Also, people

at thirties are mature enough to avoid some silly failures which can easily ruin families and

this

maturity can lead a happy

life

. In conclusion, I believe making family for people who can afford is the best approach to have a happy

life

, but in my experience people in thirties are more reliable and have more successful marriages.

Mon Jan 27 2020

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial stability
emotional maturity
secure upbringing
career prospects
education and career development
lifetime earnings
job satisfaction
health outcomes
demographic shift
population growth
ageing population
parental preparedness
responsibilities of parenting
modern healthcare
capable of having healthy pregnancies
balancing population growth
establish careers
save money
healthier relationships
better parenting

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