There are social, medical, and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of the mobile phones?

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, An often debated topic is whether using cell phones exerts positive or negative effects on human life. Personally, I agree that there are many benefits that mobile phones could bring about,
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, numerous problems of the use of it need to be concerned. According to many, people think that phones have helped their remain connected with the world from wherever they are.
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, they play with features on the applications
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as online networks, email, camera and video stay in touch with families, friends and colleagues.
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, the society is
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considering the entertainment on app as a source income.
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, gamers who play on game to achieve rewards. They can operate alone in term or online.
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, people can be a problem in some public area. In fact, ringing phone probably would cause disturbance in cinema or school lessons. For students there is a rule to activate tools with time procedures. In fact, Sometimes people are not aware that others can hear their conversation. As a matter of fact, their waves could cause a damage to our brains. Those who are using phones can
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, a driver who operates her mobile while driving can cause distraction in concentration. In conclusion, the mobile phone has become an indispensable tool in people's daily life.Not only used for communication, but it
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functions as an internet browser and so forth.
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, nothing can be overused without side effects. The contribution of the mobile phone to our modern society is prominent and people 's dependence on it is irreversible,
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it has a number of problems that should be well-handled. When using it, users need to consider carefully about the aforementioned technical, social and medical issues above.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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