The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread use of cell phones (mobile phones)? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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the

globlisation

growth to a global or worldwide scale

globalization

globalisation

happening we

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happening, we

are going towards the technology dependent

world

. Mobile phone use is being rapidly

incressed

made greater in size or amount or degree

increased

increase

in past few decades. I intend to delve into

advantages

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the advantages

and disadvantages of using cell phones without any self restrictions.

first

preceding all others in time or space or degree

First

of all, there are

lot

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lots

of advantages of cell phones. As we are progressing in

technological

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a technological world

the technological world

world

, there are new smartphones upcoming

everday

found in the ordinary course of events

everyday

. With the help of

it we

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it, we

are able to communicate with

person

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the person

a person

people

sitting in another country.

for

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For

example, we can arrange the international

conferance

a prearranged meeting for consultation or exchange of information or discussion (especially one with a formal agenda)

conference

call with the help of internet connection

avilable

obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

on our telecommunication device. As

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

name suggests, smartphones are being smarter day by day, and helping us in our occupational problems.

For instance

, in IT sector using applications

such

as Whastapp, telegram, and hike we can create a group of

pepole

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

and share work

releted

being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics

doubts on it, and at the

same same

closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree

same

moment you can pass the message to everyone from any corner of the

world

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This

resulting

into

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creating a

diffrent

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

work setup, which is

boomig

very lively and profitable

booming

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and we all call it as 'Work From Home', which comes up with

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

employe

put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose

employ

employees

employee

as well as to

compny

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the company

company

comply

coming

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Coming

to the disadvantages,

this

smart

devices

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device

are

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easily

avilable

obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service

available

in the market at

cheep price

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a cheep price

to a very great extent or degree

juvenile age group

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the juvenile age group

are aslo using

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is also using

are also using

illegaly

in an illegal manner

illegally

. Parents are providing phone to

there

of them or themselves

their

children for the communication

purpsoe

an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions

purpose

. But, they are taking extra

benifits

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

from it by using

apllication

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an application

application

applications

which

are not meant

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is not meant

for

there

of them or themselves

their

age group. As we all know from the news, that PUBG game is taking how many

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

govermet

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Govermet

should keep age

restrication

a principle that limits the extent of something

restriction

on it.

Otherwise

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our upcoming

genration

all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age

generation

generations

will have to suffer. To recapitulate,

this

devices

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device

are becoming

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is becoming

our life easier. But, at the same time if we

can not

cannot

keep control on ourself

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then

one day machines will be leading our

world

, and human

world

will be in

there

of them or themselves

their

hand

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hands

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