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Everyday traffic seems to get worse on our roads.how can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers?

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Introduction
Traffic
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 congestion is now becoming a global problem. It is undeniable that the automotive industry has blessed our lives with many
comforts but
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comforts, but
this
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 blessing proved to be unpleasant in the face of
traffic
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 congestion.
This
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 will create worse situations on our roads.
This
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 is mainly because of
high volume
Suggestion
the high volume
 of vehicles and the inadequate infrastructure and cart pooling and
use
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 public transport, massively, could solve
this
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 problem.
Body paragraph 1
To initiate with, there is a
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 of reasons for the increase in
traffic
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. In the modern era, due to the advent of technology, number of cars increases for the roadways which sometime block the roads.
For instance
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, many people have their own vehicles and
they
of them or themselves
their
use
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then
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for
Suggestion
in
 office as well as for their daily routine which usually block roads in almost all cities.
Moreover
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, lack of infrastructure
such
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 as
traffic
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 signals sync out and inadequate green time are
also
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 the causes of
traffic
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 jams.
Body paragraph 2
There are many alternatives to handle the aforementioned issues and to avoid congestion. They are fewer cars and trucks on the road, increase in mass transit options
etcetera
Suggestion
.
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, it is necessary to build these pedestrian
overpass
Suggestion
overpasses
 and more lanes in the street in order to reduce
traffic
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 and accidents. People should
use
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 car pooling or two-wheeler vehicles
instead
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 of taking
car
the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something
care
 in public places especially during festivals.
Conclusion
To conclude, single flower can not make the garland
,
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,
so, government and society should encourage people to
use
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 public transport or vehicles with small size
such
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 as bicycles or make
tax
Suggestion
a tax
 on private vehicles.
Traffic
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 problems should be controlled if checked strategically and impose it wisely.

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