Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discus both view?

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Today, in
this
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21st century of modernisation with the development of technologies, we can
also
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see different designs of buildings with shapes. As with the increase in migration of more rural people to urban
city
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, we can
also
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see the increase in the construction of buildings which is really affecting the
city
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pollution.
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, as per my opinion, I credence that
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as cities are already
conjusted
overfull as with blood
congested
with the buildings, the
design
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of newly constructed buildings in big cities is better be controlled by
government
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at certain extent.
For instance
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,
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,
in the big developing
city
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like Bangalore
,
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it's already having
huge amount
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a huge amount
of buildings which is not constructed in organise way
,
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,
but still due to increase in population
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people are
continuesly
at every point
continuously
continually
constructing new buildings. In
such
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case
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it's much better if the
government
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control
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controls
the construction by
contructing
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Constructing
Contructing
the buildings in
organize
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organizing
form to prevent the
further
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troubles.
Secondly
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,
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,
as the
buildings
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building
building's
design
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are controlled by
government
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,
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,
it would be more feasible to search the way and
also
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road will be
at
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in
better condition.
However
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,
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,
in other hand
,
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I believe that those who finance their own construction of
building
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the building
buildings
should be free to
design
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as they wish without the interference of the
government
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.
Moreover
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we are in democratic
country not
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country, not
in
communist country
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a communist country
the communist country
communist countries
.
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, it would be better if the
government
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give
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gives
suggestion to the citizens regarding building designs
,
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but giving us the choice to decide what to do. To conclude, it's a great thought of the
government
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to make our
city
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look neat and organise with their
design
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,
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,
building but every
people
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person
have their own thoughts and choices. At the same time no one will like if the money we are earning with our hard work
are
introduces an alternative
or
control of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
.
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