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Some parents think children should have mobile phones, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #children #phones
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In
this
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 modern age, the profound influence of technology on humans' lives is incontrovertible.
Therefore
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, several adults believe that
cellphones
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cell phones
 should be provided for their children, while others have an opposite view. Both perspectives will be discussed throughout the essay There are parents who say that children should be allowed for having individual mobiles for various reasons. The
first
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 and possibly
most obvious reason
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the most obvious reason
 for
this
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 is necessary, many offsprings can take various
benefit
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benefits
 of their items
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 as education, entertainment, and communication. Since the telephone is the well-innovative to necessarily use in daily life, many things are included through the mobile application so,
this
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 reason can be compared with the past.
numerous
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Numerous
 adults claim that the device is unsuitable for adolescences. The children might neglect or ignore their duties, especially homework is the most important one to consider. They might addict too much which impact their daily life. To illustrate, several offspring is going to lack concentrate on their lessons leading to failed the exam. Another point to consider is cheating on social media, people utilise in several purposes on the internet.
most
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Most
 parents actually cannot control their adolescents or know someone who text to their children
,
Accept space
,
contributing to kidnap. In conclusion, even though others claim that
cellphones
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cell phones
 is suitable for young ones, it
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 has some opposite views. As a suggestion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that the custody of children should teach how to properly use on social media and under parent's controls.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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