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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private lives?

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #lives
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Famous people are treated unfairly by the media. The reasons why I said so are as follows: Famous people should be given more privacy and
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 is because so many famous happen to to fall on their
enemies
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enemy's
enemies'
 trap through posting their upcoming events. For
instances
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instance
, a famous
person
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's journey about the time he or she will depart, his or her destination, and for how long that
person
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 at that place will be announced on social media. The enemy will set his trap and that
person
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 will eventually fall into the trap through these information
gain
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gained
 from the social media. These
informations
a statement asserting the existence or the truth of something
affirmations
information's
 bring up insecurity in that
person
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's
life
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.
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, famous people do not normally have free lifestyles compared to normal people. They cannot move freely without guards or being protected.
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 due to the fact that they might be
harm
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harmed
 by bad people.
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, a famous
person
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 might like to join an activity or a program, but because of the fact that he or she is a famous
person
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 or is from a famous background, he or she won't have the ability to join that activity.
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, famous people's decisions are normally affected by their fans or critics. These might affect their social
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.
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, a famous
person
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 might choose someone as his or her
life
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 partner and he will receive critics from his or her fans because of racism or any other reason. In conclusion, famous people should be given privacy in their
life
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