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Band 7.5

Your former homestay family is coming to see you in your home country and stay from January 31st to February 10th. Write them a letter. In your letter: Make plans to meet them at a convenient location specify a time and date suggest some activities you may all participate in during their visit

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Hope you are doing well! I am surprised to hear that you are visiting my place in Toronto for a couple of weeks. I am really happy that we are getting a chance to meet again after years. The weather will be pleasant during your stay. You told me about the hotel in which you are going to stay
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 2 hours away from my place. But on the 4th and 5th of
February
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February,
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 I am free, and we can plan to meet. If you want, I can pick you up from your hotel and we can start our day with a yummy breakfast and take you to some historical places and make the most of that time. My parents
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 know about your visit to Toronto, and they are eager to meet you. It will be great if you can plan a couple of days to stay at my place. My mother will be really happy to give you a taste of traditional food. And during those days you can get a flavour of local life in my town
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 that we can cherish some old days when we used to stay together. Looking forward to see you soon. Yours Sincerely Ashima Gulati

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coherence and cohesion
Try to introduce your plans more clearly and explicitly at the beginning of the letter to enhance the overall organization.
task achievement
Consider adding specific details about the historical places you plan to visit to make the activities more vivid and engaging.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for the context.
complete response
You effectively conveyed excitement about the visit and included personal touches related to your family, enhancing the personal connection.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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