Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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fast-changing and competitive
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, children must earn enough skills for being a wellbeing member of
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. There is a big debate about where children can learn these skills. While some people put the responsibility on schools, others believe that parents should take the lead
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enhancing their offspring's social skills. In my view; whereas, schools have an influence on teaching children about their roles in
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, parents carry more duty in
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task. The
school
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community where children are entering. It is
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best to place for them to get experience in communicating with people from a whole variety of backgrounds.
Teacher’s primary role
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The teacher’s primary role
is imparting information and knowledge, but they should
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focus on student´s social skills. Because pupils are greatly influenced by their teachers.
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, teachers impose more discipline comparing with
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parents, which
intensifies the learning process.
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, a child can be well educated at
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about the recycling process and the consequences of not separating waste in a better and more updated way comparing with what their parents can teach them.
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, parents should take more responsibility to enhance their child’s ability for living in a diverse community. If students are not well informed about how to cope with issues of living and cooperating with others in
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, will face problems when entering a wider community.
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, a student who did not gain enough social skills from home is at risk of bullying from peers at
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, a person who is bullied at
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cannot be a wellbeing member of
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. In conclusion, while teaching social skills to the
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generation at
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is very influential, parents are still playing the most significant part of their
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child's
life to prepare them in order to face social challenges and be worthwhile citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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