Scientists and technologists are seems to be more valued in society than artists and muscians in what extent do you agree?

It is commonly believed that researchers and
technology
contribute more than artists and singers.
However
, I do
also
agree our
society
encourages science and
technology but
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technology, but
musicians and artists are
also
a vital part of our
society
for keeping our culture alive.
one
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One
group of people in our
society
think
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thinks
that science and
technology
play an important role in the entire development of our
society
. They believe that scientific inventions and technological implementation in broader aspects can reduce the poverty level as well as boost our national economy.
This
can be illustrated by introducing high yielding variety in our agricultural system. Scientists
also
introduced drought and salt-tolerant variety for more production. Introducing modern
technology
in an agricultural system
such
as drum seeder, applicator and urea super granule
also
can be set as an example
for
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of
climate-smart
technology
in the agricultural system. Though they are playing an important role in the economic development of our
society they don't
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society, they don't
play any roles for our culture and heritage.
On the other
hand artists
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hand, artists
and musicians practice keeping our National heritage. Every independent state should have an identity. In
this
regard, artists and musicians play dynamic roles. Artists
also
can be a means of the economic rise of a country through the tourism sector. They can set design for the decoration of the
tourist's
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tourist
spot and several monuments can be set up to attract the tourist.
at
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At
the same time, their artistic works add the heritage value of the
society
. During our liberation war, artists and singers wrote many lyrics and songs to get inspire the freedom fighter. In our country, we gave birth to notable artists, singers and they brought
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
to our beloved country. So, Though scientists and
technology
experts are playing many important roles I don't agree that they should get priority over artists and musicians.
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