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Describe an old object which your family keep for a long time. What the object is Where it came from How long it has been in your family Explain why you family want to keep it

Ancestral belongings hold a special place in people’s heart. Here, I would like to tell about an old device in my parents' house. It is a treadle sewing
machine
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 which is to
tal d
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totally
ifferent from current electrical ones in the market.  My father bought it as a gift to my
mother
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 in the early 1980s in Shenzhen. At the moment, it was an expensive and precious gift to my
mother
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.  Eventually right now it is still in a good shape, sitting in my parents' house in our ho
metown which i
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hometown, which
s about about 400 kms far aw
ays f
from a particular thing or place or position
away
rom Shenzhen. It has been kept here for the
last
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 30 years.It becomes one of oldest belongs in my
mother
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's house. It was maintained very well by my
mother
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. The device is always covered with a piece of clothe all year round. Nobody will touch it, except my mo
m. 
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 Every year, when my
mother
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 travelled back to our hometown for Spring Festival, she always spent half day in dusting it and adding lubricant to it. It still functions properly. My 
mother
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 has been keeping and maintaining it for the past 30 years. The major reason for
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 is that it is a gift from dad who passed away 15 years ago. To my mo
m,
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the sewing
machine
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 is one of tangible gifts from my father and has priceless value. It reminds us the precious memory of my father. The
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 reason is that my mom used
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 sewing
machine
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 to sew all the clothes for her children in the early days as a newcomer in Shenzhen in ea
rly 1980s.
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the early 1980s
It is a symbol of pride for my
mother
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 who had been struggling for the
first
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 10 years in Shenzhen. She has become a millionaire from a newcomer with only 50 yuan in her pocket at the moment in early 1980s. I believe that
this
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 treadle sewing
machine
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 will be passed on from generation to generation in my brother's family. If one day they dump the
this
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 sewing
machine
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, I will definitely flight back to China and keep it and even shift to Canada here.

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