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with increase in global tourism it has become obvious that there are many advantages and disadvantages that can be found from the effects of tourism. do you believe advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Since the invention of aeroplanes, global
tourism
 has risen rapidly. While
this
tourism
 has brought many benefits, the disadvantages that came along with it can't be ignored.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the topic while maintaining a neutral stand.
First
 and foremost, one can't argue against the
economical
Suggestion
economic
 benefits of
tourism
 industry for any city, state or country. There are many countries who rely heavily on tourists for their budget and financial stability. Some countries total export are equal to what they earn through
tourism
.
For example
, Indonesia, Australia and several other Pacific island nations depend on tourists as they bring in more than their total exports per annum. These countries are enjoying the advantages of visitors since they have become tourist hotspots for many years due to the facilities they provide to attract more and more people every year.
On the contrary
, with
this
 increase in the
tourism
, comes the danger of many diseases being brought to countries not exposed to before.
For example
, the Ebola virus outbreak back in 2015 as well as current
cronavirus
relating to or characteristic of carnivores
carnivorous
 outbreak from mainland China to almost all around the world happened because of the people visiting other countries from the disease effected countries,
thus
 becoming a host and spreading the disease where ever they go. In conclusion, it can be said that there are many advantages and disadvantages of
this
tourism
, but it's a bit hard to conclude if the benefits outweigh the troubles from the
tourism
 or not.
Therefore
, I can easily say that
this
 topic needs more time and research for us to be able to find out either the advantages are greater than the disadvantages of the global
tourism
 or not.

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