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The world’s most urgent problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #over-population
There is no doubt that over-population is one of the most prevailing
problem
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problems
 globally, but is it the most urgent issue? I completely agree with the statement that it is the most urgent and in
this
 essay I will give reasons for my opinion.
First
 and foremost, health problems which are prevailing around the globe are partially caused by
over crowding
cause to crowd together too much
overcrowding
,
for example
 tuberculosis. To elaborate, due to sharing of small rooms, if one person
is diagnosed
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diagnoses
 of tuberculosis, the other roommates are
likley
has a good chance of being the case or of coming about
likely
 to contract it as well due to lack of ventilation.
For instance
, in
Zimbabwe where
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Zimbabwe, where
 accommodation is expensive, people usually share rooms.
In addition
, lack of resources due to high populations
have caused
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has caused
 poverty especially in developing countries. A good example is that of Zimbabwe which has got the highest population of school
drop-outs
someone who quits school before graduation
dropouts
drop-out
 due to financial activities.
Nevertheless
, having a myriad of people in a nation leads to
hight
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
high
highest
 rates of unemployment.
This
 is because, the companies are less as compared to the
populations
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populations, hence
hence
 some people will face challenges in finding jobs. In conclusion, I strongly agree that over-crowding is one of the leading challenges in the universe as evidenced by the problems that it has caused
such
 as scarcity of resources, unemployment and health problems.

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