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Band 7.5

You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter •thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience •explain what you hope to learn from the work experience •ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my gratitude for providing me with an opportunity to work with your prestigious organisation and acquire certain information regarding my upcoming experience. First of all, I would like to thank the entire management for considering me out of all the competitive candidates for three months of on-the-job training starting
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 1st March 2025.
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, I am quite eager to learn different concepts related to accounting and taxation. Being a quick learner, I hope that I will be able to understand personal & corporate tax returns before the end of tax season i.e. 30th April 2025.
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, I expect that bookkeeping procedures will not take much longer time under your guidance. I would be highly grateful if you could share any online training material before joining your company.
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, I would like to know if I can open my own firm after working at your association. Thank you for your time and consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Babit Batra

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down some of your longer sentences into shorter ones for clarity in your ideas.
task response
While thanking the manager is great, you could also mention how you plan to contribute to the organization during your work experience.
task achievement
Your tone is appropriately formal and respectful, which is excellent for a letter of this nature.
task achievement
You have clearly outlined your learning goals and questions, which shows a proactive approach to your work experience.
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