It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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if comeone passionate about something thoer shouldnt reached their level with in a short period of time their want to find which were their really like to do without boring and those people must want a good coach to get some practices so not all the people are born with

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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Fully explain your ideas

In some cities, people prefer riding bicycles rather than drive cars. In some other cities, people choose to drive cars rather than ride bicycles. What are the reasons for their preferences? Which one do you think is a better development?

in many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. do you think is a positive or a negative development?

Taking a year of between finishing school and starting university is a waste of students' time. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

some countries encourage foreign companies to open in their country. many people think that government should focus on encouraging local businesses rather than foreign businesses. To what extent do you agree?

Holding International games such as The Olympic Games is an exciting event. Some people think that it has positive effects while other argue that it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion.