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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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 if comeone passionate about something thoer shouldnt reached their level with in a short period of time their want to find which were their really like to do without boring and those people must want a good coach to get some practices so not all the people are born with
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 some time some people can be taught to become a good sports person or musician because its naturallly come to them
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